Could this ever last?

[L]

I've started and finished one Death Note Fanfiction. I'd like your honast opion on how it is, please... Because I'm very curious to see how many people liked it, and how many think it could be better.

www.fanfiction.net/s/4520855/1/Could_this_ever_last


Same thing with it's sequal please... :3

www.fanfiction.net/s/5307688/1/I_vs_Kira